Response – Mafia Land

Reading: “Mafia Land” by Aaron F. Lucky

Impressions: (these comments were directed to the author) Good concept, and I especially liked that you didn’t reveal some things about your main character until later into the story.

I would love to see a bit more in the transition back from “the lioness” to the human, grieving wife.

The first-person viewpoint is very effective in this story. The only thing I’m missing is some sort of physical description of the main character. The only description we get as readers is that she is black.

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